[elder brother of 1- silver carp]
" Wang Chong put in prison " this one chapter, write indeed pretty good. We will see the around cause of this paragraph of next gut.
Above all, leading role is in border of grandfather big Shou Zhi, of hear imperial court " the section is spent make " policy.
Because have preexistence experience, get " the section is spent make " kill. Leading role is mixed before the grandfather the face of patriarch of numerous imperial court, give character to object. Clear specification " the section is spent make " the harm of policy, and win the support of attendant everybody.
Later, object " the section is spent make " opinion, give an emperor by report of leading role grandfather.
After the emperor listens to an opinion, subpoena leading role, want to listen to be elaborated in detail.
Leading role is entered by call together from this palace, close self-sufficient emperor is told accuse oneself are right " the section is spent make " opinion, next the emperor asks its write the opinion into written memorial to the throne, present an imperial court, and give 100 officials pass round for perusal.
100 officials pass round for perusal, this thing lifted tremendous disturbance on hall of hold office at court.
But, the emperor wants this just in time, he wants a water mix namely, let float of a few people come out.
Official of introduced from the northern and western nationalities or from abroad person jumps out to object, they are malcontent very; This forces so that the Han people jumps out again, this policy the Han people is more malcontent, both sides is ripped each other than,
Later, imperial approval arrests Wang Chong, catch Wang Chong into day prison, make alien cannot atttack Wang Chong, wang Chong protection rises.
Full imperial intention.
PS: All is a road.
[bruise of 2- month shadow]
The time that used 3 days is chased after eventually more to newest paragraphic.
This book with big Tang Li history for chief source, however not history of bureau be confined to, having deep reflection, have deepness and sense very much, visible author left very great time, show deep respect here, hope author can make persistent efforts.
Raise two small proposals additionally.
One is leading role again world humanness, especially the depict on the thought should be again a few deeper, a few scheme in the book appear too feeble, often discovered a fierce person namely, next what thing with respect to follow a rational line to do some work well, still want to show the scheme of leading role more.
The masterstroke of another stone that is a destiny dash forward show not quite apparent, appear dispensable in early days, the hope can have more plots in again follow-up work.
Still be first-rate as a whole nevertheless work, cheer!
[3- life elsewhere Zy]
Will say my a few views to person emperor discipline simply.
1, the person of familiar Huangfu Zunpin, looked to leave piece, should meet have a few friendly feeling.
The article has fly litre of shadow with weeks big.
Does the article come up to understand the main task: of leading role with respect to the dot?
2, the book of a surname, the individual thinks to have a characteristic -- warm blood.
Fly litre look I am to burn with righteous indignation.
Article begin also has a way with commonly used novel of a few networks -- renascence, hit passerby face to wait.
Coming to those who say leading role to hang at present is preexistence memory. The influence of actual strength of itself of be confined to,
3, this book comes for a surname of 17k piece make.
From run for, commerciality should be the larger proportion that hold.
So a road according to commercial language, leading role should all sorts of oxen force all sorts of outfit force, passerby all sorts of exclaim, for instance passerby armour, passerby second all sorts of sneering at, leading role amaze the people with a single brilliant feat, all sorts of hitting face.
But we know, a surname writes such writing not to come out, consult the god is made.
Of this book write a law a little a bit more implicative namely family of leading role change is right a variety of practices of own sense organ.
4, the place that says I am not quite satisfactory to this book.
A. The article is at present fast 400 thousand words, still can be a map.
Gut progress is very slow.
Wang Chong did what thing, are we OK and simple does enumerate come out: ? ?23 of press and smooth of commonplace of crock of armpit of of Bu of plating of of ǎ of bud of A Chinese-style unlined garment of of ignoranting bed of Hao of of sparrow Gai Zhu, the attention of vivid grandfather and today's acquisition red medicine.
Half-baked thing has Su Zhengchen. 400 thousand words, progress arrives at present this is planted condition, my individual feels slow.
B, the type of this book is east black unreal, but at present I believe a lot of people feel is historical built on stilts.
Tell true, I read the book of east black unreal only of a surname, but the sign that at present I did not see black unreal.
C, what the climax comes is not complete, clue of sword of steel of black at present is a bit expatiatory and laggard. Partial character is OK and compact.
Person emperor discipline can see the change of a surname.
Remember be being broken in some bit before more do not say reason does not let sb know, it is the silver carp will inform commonly.
This book can see a surname was changed a lot of.
The likelihood suffers the effect of the land of country of an emperor drive, clue spread out is slow, this I think to need to accelerate, meet otherwise prediction of a person's luck in a given year one part reader, because the family can think,you are in hydrology.
Compare satisfaction newlier at present. The individual hopes or two stabler, erupt when adventitious, such reaching assure quality, can have a little surprise now and then again.
Also not be very big to oneself body burden.
